Monday, 29 November 2010

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EXT.train station.morning

MIKE looks at his watch realising just how late he is by half an hour for work already late with his tie scuffled looking very rushed because of how late he was this morning didn't have time to do all the usual things like brush his hair or fully tuck in his shirt and wearing his half broken belt unaware.


in the train station waiting for his train to arrive.


CLOSE UP:on his watch

looks down at his watch flashing late

CLOSE UP: back of mikes head.

in anticipation of waiting for his train mike scratches his head with a annoyance.


train arrives

PAN:from character to train

mike looks realised that the train has arrived.

INT.on train

MIKE walks to find the nearest seat holding his suitcase handle with a firm grip tapping his fingers on the handle looking round wondering impatiently when the train is going to leave the station.


sits next to mike making herself comfortable in the seat with her large weight making the seat creak whilst invading Mikes personal space.

ZOOM IN: on mikes discomfort expression.



loud noise from window slamming open above him

loud noise makes mike jump not expecting it and looks like his heart skipped a beat. mike reached up to close it feeling the draft.


ZOOM IN:hand trying to shut window.

failing miserably mike sits back down tapping his suitcase impatiently.


reaches into her bag and brings out a large packet of crisps simular to a packet of monster munch, begins eating the crisps making a mess eating very unlady like making crumbs go flying everywhere.


CLOSE UP:only on mike getting crumbs on him.

has crumbs coming across from passenger next to him.getting agrovated but without loosing it and brushes off the mess.


phone begins to vibrate

mike hears the phone in panic blasts open the suitcase shuffling round with his head in the suitcase quickly trying to find the phone.

(look of agrovation)

ZOOM IN:on the phone

phone stops vibrating

closes suitcase checks his left pocket where his phone mite be then sees his phone lying right next to him and puts his phone away in his pocket and puts his suitcase back between his legs and crosses his legs.

stage left

curious where the toilet is mike looks for signs from where he is then walks across a few feet away near the door for the toilet.closes the door behind him

CLOSE UP:from behind mike.

mike has a silent sigh then opens his buckle and his trousers fall to his knees while he goes, whilst the shirt is still covering his behind.

ZOOM IN:on mikes face

realising the train is stopping mike pulls up his trousers runs out to leave the train when his trousers are loose like they don't fit him.

from exit of train

VERY WIDE SHOT:showing seats and exit of train doors open.

mike trips as hes so close to the exit

CLOSE UP:on mikes face as the doors close


gets up and sorts himself out.


goes back and picks up his suitcase and sits next to a window trying to relax annoyed at himself how he could miss his stop.

passenger 2

teenager with hoody on gangster look pretty content sits next to mike and gets out his ipod.


releaved that the person doesn't take up two seats an smother him looks across at the passenger.


flicks through radio stations trying to find something he likes not bothered about passengers around him.


slowly takes off his tie, irratically shakes his hands infront of his face then sits back and smiles